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I've got it all but your love by ~Iralie:iconIralie:

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I've got it all but your love

I've got everything I'll ever need
I've got all I wanted too
But it is all meaningless without you
You and your love

All my dreams and hearts desires
I've got them all bar one
And that's you
You and your love

I went to town and bought it all
All I could buy for myself
But one thing was missing and that's you
You and your love

Everything I own
A fortune to behold
It means nothing to me without you
You and your love
©2005-2009 ~Iralie
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Author's Comments

A little somthing I made on the way home from school today (22/2/05), I had a tune for it and some words popped into my head.
"I've got it all but you, you and your love" and I liked the sound of it.

Originally made to be a song I had a nice little drum thingy going for it too which I kept in mind while writing some of it, I hope you enjoy. Also I feel the last two stanzas lack something, but can not put my finger on it, so opinions and ideas are mopre welcome than normal (which is welcome).

all infomation was correct at time of writing,

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~666-marty-666 Feb 22, 2005, 9:05:03 AM
is cool man, dont thini ki coudl ever think of thikngs liek that lol, but keep it up man

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~repta Feb 22, 2005, 2:23:04 PM
do you find it incredibly hard to understand martin too?
anyway "It means nothing to me without you" maybe you could take out the "to me" bit
and instead of going to town you could go out instead (3rd stanza)
but its a really nice peice any way, very cool :D
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~Iralie Feb 22, 2005, 4:28:43 PM
Thanks for that. I'll try to keep it up.
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~Iralie Feb 22, 2005, 4:30:05 PM
Ok, those are some nice hints, and I might see what it looks like with them. THanks Moffat.

Also what do you mean hard to understand? But thanks for the comments and praise.
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~repta Feb 23, 2005, 1:30:32 AM
thats ok and about martin he ty pefs liker thisd ande youi canty undertstand waht eh is on abouyt
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~TheThirdHelix Feb 23, 2005, 3:32:35 PM
He means he likes Red Hot Chilli Peppers, so he can't handle intelligent lyrics -.-

Nice work, dude.

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--Stitch: Born only for the benefit of those with flash photography
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~Iralie Feb 23, 2005, 5:20:47 PM
Oh I get it now... i got the martin and too wrong way round, though you couldnot understand poem thingy. It all makes snese now.
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~Iralie Feb 23, 2005, 5:23:31 PM
Like DUDE! Thanks,

And I tottaly apricaite the DUDE! DUDE!.

And like get this DUDE! I'm like on the interwebs, doing stuff, and then I decide to do a total stoner surfer post saying DUDE! in all caps right, with a ! at the end DUDE!

It's like awesome DUDE!
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~TheThirdHelix Feb 28, 2005, 7:16:01 AM
....Duuuuuude.

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--Stitch: Born only for the benefit of those with flash photography
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